My poem on women

MutlekM

Junior Member
:salam2:
BismAllaah Alrahman Alraheem

Are we the oppressors when we die for our women,
Or is it the trespassers that say wearing a veil is a sin?

Is it the countries where prostitutes is a norm
And where their pride and honor is torn,
Or the ones who truly respect women’s form?
We are only trying to protect something you can’t buy or loan.

Muslim women only wear what the Mother of Christ wore,
And they testified to what she testifies to her lord
That there is only one God, above all,
It’s called La Ilaha ila Allah.
Don’t you see…
A 3rd of this countries woman will be raped
Although Muslim women have this fact dodged and taped
It’s wearing a hijab in front of strangers
It’s like protecting a beautiful diamond from a robber in anger.

So why do you give our women a made-up identity,
Then you say your women is free
So tell me who are the ones with the STDs
But it’s truly only a fake Liberty

Don’t deny this it’s only fact
And you have just been stacked
At the back of the pack
Don’t blame me It’s your fault your logic was crap

People are dyin cause of what you fantasizing
I ain’t buyin what you’re advertisin
Yes, I’m denyin cause the truth is what I’m memorizing
Unlike you I aint lyin cause I’ve been analyzing

You think I’m playin
When I say your ideals are worshipping Satan
Although I don’t understand why you hatin
There is nothing wrong with the idea of One God to whom I should be prayin
But it won’t be too long before you realize what you’ve been failing
It’s either the good deed which will do the savin
Or it can be a sin that you be payin
It’s a test of life that’s all I’m sayin
:wasalam:
 

xAllahKnowsBestx

Junior Member
Walaykum assalam brother.

Your poems are awesooome!! This one especially. xD They remind me of Boona Mohammad [the greatest/awesomest poet everrrrrr btw]. So, yeah! lol.

Jazakallahu khayr for sharing! :hijabi:
 

MutlekM

Junior Member
Walaykum assalam brother.

Your poems are awesooome!! This one especially. xD They remind me of Boona Mohammad [the greatest/awesomest poet everrrrrr btw]. So, yeah! lol.

Jazakallahu khayr for sharing! :hijabi:

JazakAllaah khair inshaAllaah i will continue poetry as a hobby
Peace:)
 

IHearIslam

make dua 4 ma finals
Assalaamu alaikum,

DAYUM !! dude that was amazing.....sounded like rap to me though but subhana'Allaah it was AMAZING!! I love these lines the best btw::

People are dyin cause of what you fantasizing
I ain’t buyin what you’re advertisin
Yes, I’m denyin cause the truth is what I’m memorizing
Unlike you I aint lyin cause I’ve been analyzing


you GOT mad talent masha'Allaah, tabaraka'Allaah!! Stay blessed akhi
 

samiha

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Staff member
-- Moved to Poetry Section --

Edit: I just read the poem. It's a good start mashaAllaah and great intentions... would you mind if I did a bit more of a critique of it though? I do have to warn that I may be frank in that case, and you're entirely entitled to saying No, since I don't want to offend or anything.
 

MutlekM

Junior Member
Assalaamu alaikum,

DAYUM !! dude that was amazing.....sounded like rap to me though but subhana'Allaah it was AMAZING!! I love these lines the best btw::

People are dyin cause of what you fantasizing
I ain’t buyin what you’re advertisin
Yes, I’m denyin cause the truth is what I’m memorizing
Unlike you I aint lyin cause I’ve been analyzing


you GOT mad talent masha'Allaah, tabaraka'Allaah!! Stay blessed akhi
shukran ukhti i hav a bit of a rap influence because of my background but mostly its a poem.
:wasalam:

MASHA ALLAH nice one..

hm.. waiting for more stanzas..:)
shukran inshaAllaah ill come up with a new one soon
alhamdulillah really nice poem keep up the good work , take care bro .

thx i will inshAllaah
 

MutlekM

Junior Member
-- Moved to Poetry Section --

Edit: I just read the poem. It's a good start mashaAllaah and great intentions... would you mind if I did a bit more of a critique of it though? I do have to warn that I may be frank in that case, and you're entirely entitled to saying No, since I don't want to offend or anything.

its all right u hav more experience with this stuff than me and i dont mind it bein moved.and shukran
 

hayat84

I'm not what you believe
You wrote a really touching poem,may Allah be clement with the sinners and mayHe forgive them.keep on with your poems.:wasalam:
 
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